1. Introduction: The introduction explains what my piece is going to be about ; the queen and her personality disorder. The first sentence in my opinion is attention-getting.
2. Thesis: The thesis is "The Queen of Hearts is one of the many characters who is diagnose as to having a personality disorder" I think the thesis is pretty good, it is argumentative and it speaks out for itself as to what my essay is going to be about. However there is a mistake that needs to be fixed; rather than "diagnose" it should be "diagnosed"
3. Structure: Every paragraph is broken down. The first paragraph introduces the topic. The first body paragraphs explains what a psychopathic disorder is. The second body paragraph describes the queens behaviors. The third body paragraph tells us one of the diagnostic criteria's for a psychopath which is impulsiveness and explaining how the queen relates to that. The fourth body paragraph shows how the queen has no remorse for others and then there is the conclusion, which narrows everything down. I think each paragraph focused on the main topic. With the explanations, you will find the queen to have a personality disorder.
4. Clarity/Style: I found a few spelling mistakes also a fragment, but the overall essay seems formal.
5. Resources: There were no citing for this essay.
6: Strength: I would say my strength was being able to stay on topic.
Compare/Contrast.
ReplyDeleteIntroduction: For the introduction, my peer and I agree that my first sentence is attention-getting and that the paragraph introduces the topic,
Thesis: My peers agrees that my introduction is very well structured, however she mentioned that i forgot to state the title of the book.
Structure: My peer believes that my paragraphs are well structured; each paragraph explains what the topic is going to be about. I do believe i need to add more quotes onto to some of the paragraphs however.
Clarity/Style: We agree to have found a few spelling mistakes and that the essay is formal.
Resources: We both acknowledge the fact that there were no citing found in this essay.
Strength: My peer believe my strengths were that i was able to keep everything organized and the language was good, I thought that my strength was to be on topic. However, they are pretty much the same thing So i think me and her both agree to that.